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A Light In The Window, Short Story.
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#11
07-07-2011, 04:40 PM
wow thats a nice story bro Smile!
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#12
07-10-2011, 04:38 AM
Great story, but as BlackChaos said, try using a range of pronouns, it has the potential to be much better.
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#13
07-10-2011, 05:54 PM
Great story, I like it a lot! You may want to change some wording though, because you started half the paragraphs with "Tom"
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#14
07-16-2011, 04:23 PM
Very nice. You're very creative, that was a long and well thought out poem.
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07-27-2011, 11:33 AM
Thanks guys, I'll edit the problems in the near future!
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#16
07-28-2011, 03:55 AM
Agreed, this is indeed creative. Great ending as well.
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#17
07-28-2011, 10:00 AM
Short stories are my favorite. I'm not good with the long term commitment that comes attached to a novel. I need to find a short story book lol.
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#18
07-28-2011, 06:16 PM
That story was well written and I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the work, a lot of people will enjoy your work.
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#19
08-11-2011, 12:51 AM
Great work, hate how most short stories are sad.
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#20
11-29-2011, 12:44 AM
This was a great short story. I really enjoyed it.
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