The Eyelash That Ended The World [My First Short Story]

[JustHayden]

sector 7-g. Homer's place. if you wanted to expand the story a little, ad some atmospheric descriptions of the scenes the characters are in. or describe what john is feeling as he realises the severity of what is happening.
" as John looked at the timer he felt a void opening in the pit of his stomach, he felt the blood drain from his face as though it were trying to escape his body and avoid the blast that would vaporise it, and John along with it" etc.
good start though.

Ya it would have been a lot better if I put more description into it. Thanks for the feedback!