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A rap I've made.
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#11
08-01-2010, 04:00 PM (This post was last modified: 08-01-2010, 04:00 PM by step down kid.)
It's good, but nothing special.
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08-01-2010, 04:06 PM
I like this man! Really cool, well done.
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#13
08-01-2010, 04:28 PM
I think it's hard to judge the quality without being able to hear it.
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08-03-2010, 10:36 PM
(08-01-2010, 04:28 PM)Sam Wrote: I think it's hard to judge the quality without being able to hear it.

I second the motion, however I still like the lyrics.
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#15
08-03-2010, 11:14 PM (This post was last modified: 08-03-2010, 11:14 PM by Rhythm.)
It's rather short, and there are some lines that are kind of amateur sounding.
More specifically-
"You messin with my emotions makes me go insane
Wish I could use magic and float away like david blaine"

It needs some work, and needs more cleverness in it. Clever rhymes are what make memorable raps.
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