He Was My King

[Peter L]

I was so ignorant back when I was younger
I thought I had something no one else did
He said things I didn't understand because I was just a kid
He was my idol, he was my role model, he was my King

You can ask any of my friends, I always praised him
It was like he could never do anything wrong to hurt me
that was all I knew and I was brainwashed into thinking he couldnt desert me
He was my idol, he was my role model, he was my King

I got older and I fell in love. I had created a family and I realized this was something I never had before
Yes that was it, I've simply never been loved
I thought he was showing me love everytime I had been shoved
But my wife showed me what true love was
He was my idol, he was my role model, he was my King

It was mothers day and I was 26, I took my son to the movies
My father comes to my house while I'm out, he berates me and my wife
Why? Because I hadnt see my mother yet who he knows was my whole life
He demanded an answer: "what kind of man are you? you and your family are worthless. you. you choose now. them or us." I chose them, my family.
He was my idol, he was my role model, he was my King

A drunken man was all he was to me now. Now I realized I had nothing growing up
My wife's father became my father, a real dad
I didnt talk to my father for 8 years, my wife and kids were all that I had
Then my mother got sick, she had had a stroke
It left her without speech for the rest of her life
But last Monday before she died her speech became clear
She was sorry for the damage her husband has done here
Yes, her husband. He was no longer my father.
I told her its ok but we both know that it wasnt
She passed on silently and I hope venting will alleviate the pain but it just doesn't
He WAS my idol, he WAS my role model, he WAS my King

[Cronus]

It was mothers day and I was 26, I took my son to the movies
By father comes to my house while I'm out, he berates me and my wife
Why? Because I hadnt see my mother yet who he knows was my whole life
He demanded an answer: "what kind of man are you? you and your family are worthless. you. you choose now. them or us." I chose them, my family.
He was my idol, he was my role model, he was my King

Great stanza! Keep up the good work, hope to see more work from you.

[Peter L]

Thanks for the comment Cronus.

[sunexim]

So enjoyable man Keep up this good work and i am also waiting for more

[Juicy Booty]

Very well written, and also enjoyable. I would say this has been one of the most well written ones I have read on here.

[BlackChaos]

Very well written piece Laugh. I could feel the emotions you were trying to convey and for the most part, the symmetry and pace was flawless.

It was mothers day and I was 26, I took my son to the movies
My father comes to my house while I'm out, he berates me and my wife
Why? Because I hadnt see my mother yet who he knows was my whole life
He demanded an answer: "what kind of man are you? you and your family are worthless. you. you choose now. them or us." I chose them, my family.
He was my idol, he was my role model, he was my King

The fourth stanza, however, stands out a little too far. The third line, in my opinion could have been incorporated within two or even three lines without disturbing the overall scheme of the poem. It wouldn't matter too much either ways since the last stanza was also quite lengthy as compared to the previous ones.

However, I did enjoy reading it and experiencing the touch of some one who idolizes/used to idolize someone really important in their life. Its really a great approach as well. It kind of reminds me of a poem I wrote a long time ago regarding a friend of mine. Although it's not as mellow and toned down as yours is.

Great work Laugh. I do hope you keep writing and sharing more of your work with us.