Writing for the first time

[NekoChan]

Spend more time introducing the story, I was confused and lost through it all. I see what you're attempting, but try to be as detailed as possible.

I think you should re-read my thread. Then if you are interested in the story or this thread go look up few anime shows or mangas. Then you come back and delete your comment.

I said it's in a manga and anime style. Manga starts mysteriously too, with little to no story at the start.