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Sea of Blue - Owleyed.Louu - 10-05-2011
It was the eve of the new year
Year of '05
First time seeing death
With my own blue eyes
The doctors said you would be fine
But the tubes made me think twice
I would've visited you more Papa,
But mommah says i had to be like a mice.
To see you looking like that
So fragil and pale,
I was scared to touch you
To hold you because you were to weak.
We visited only once,
The day that we left you.
I swear I saw you Papa,
And you where the one who saved me.
The sound of the tires,
The smel of the gas.
Makes me believe,
You gave me my second chance.
I know you might be mad,
That i blame myself for your death.
But i was only a baby girl,
When you died in that room.
Mommah seemed to have left me,
The same day you did.
What was I to do
When i was still the kid?
Becca was so young,
That she blamed mom for it.
Yet, now it seems she understands,
The story a little bit.
I miss you,
Christmas isn't the same since you went away.
I still remember the times,
That we went to go play..
When are you coming for a visit,
Mommah misses you too.
And everytime the days come around,
I go into a sea of Blue.
I grew up fast that day,
Left my childhood in the past.
Maybe that's why it seems,
My life went by so fast.
I dont know what to do anymore,
Without you here to help.
I cant ask mommy,
I just got her back.
So that is why,
I find the sorces to numb it all.
Because then I can,
Try to pretend that i'm not hurt.
I have faked my happiness,
For so long.
That i don't know if i can be myself,
And let people in.
I'm scared papa,
I feel like crying for weeks.
But then i would leave my family,
In the dark without a helping hand.
I stopped Believing,
Four years ago.
And no one understands,
Why I don't anymore.
It will slowly get better,
This pain that I feel.
But i wish I could tell you,
How much I love you.
I love you Papa,
Even if I never said it alot.
I miss you Papa,
And You won't ever be forgot.
I know its to late to say,
But I need you.
Please come back to me,
And save me from this sea of blue...
RE: Sea of Blue - Pulse - 10-06-2011
I think that was a great poem. I like how I had to read it twice to entirely understand it. 9/10
RE: Sea of Blue - Carbon Host - 10-06-2011
good work, is this for a school class?
RE: Sea of Blue - Two - 10-07-2011
Nice poem you have here. I also had to read It twice lol but still good effort.
RE: Sea of Blue - Owleyed.Louu - 10-09-2011
(10-06-2011, 04:35 PM)iiosama Wrote: good work, is this for a school class?
No it wasn't, it was just something I wrote. But I got it published in my High School's book.
RE: Sea of Blue - Jinu - 11-26-2011
this is nice poem dude wonderful!!!
RE: Sea of Blue - Graveee - 11-26-2011
Nice, very touching and wonderful poem. Do you write often? You should ;).
RE: Sea of Blue - Burner™ - 11-27-2011
The doctors said you would be fine
But the tubes made me think twice
I would've visited you more Papa,
But mommah says i had to be like a mice. I love that bit.
RE: Sea of Blue - n00bikscube - 11-27-2011
read it twice lol. I like it. 9/10
RE: Sea of Blue - Graveee - 11-27-2011
N00bikscube, I reccomend you stop spamming for 100 posts, you will be banned and never get the 'Support Feather' you're after. Be HQ mate!