Writing for the first time

[NekoChan]

In my opinion, be more insightful. Example;

“You probably could beat them both, if you came back to fight here” she insisted in a stubborn manner.

Now, I don't know if stubborn is what you intended that line to feel as, but I think you catch my drift.

A better wording and feel to the dialogue? I will try to make it better, thank you.

I now have finished chapter 2, I will start uploading them soon to somewhere.