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[SHORT POEM] Silent night. - Magma - 05-01-2012 He it goes. First night on my own No where to go on my own Winters breath brings a chill to my body everything around me closes in. The night is quite silent when your on your own. /thoughts RE: [SHORT POEM] Silent night. - fanta - 05-01-2012 I learned that is should be A:First night on my own A: No where to go on my own B: Winters breath brings a chill to my body B: O boy, do I feel snotty (added in, needs to rhyme with above) A:Everything around me closes in B:The night is quite silent when your on your own RE: [SHORT POEM] Silent night. - Corpzz - 05-01-2012 You said 'own' way too much. Should use different words. RE: [SHORT POEM] Silent night. - Magma - 05-02-2012 That was the point sir. It was the subject sentence. RE: [SHORT POEM] Silent night. - Daniel Faraday - 05-24-2012 (05-01-2012, 05:31 PM)fanta Wrote: I learned that is should be The most common rhyme schemes are abab cdcd efef gg aabb ccdd eeff (gg) aaaa bbbb cccc If they even have rhyming couplets. RE: [SHORT POEM] Silent night. - Canoris - 05-24-2012 Then don't use it at the end of the line. Use it at the beginning. RE: [SHORT POEM] Silent night. - Daniel Faraday - 05-25-2012 (05-24-2012, 08:26 PM)Aиγέλ Oφ Kαος Wrote: Then don't use it at the end of the line. Use it at the beginning. Using at the end of the line really helps the repetition, but I do agree that the usage could be better. Tears, Idle Tears is a great example of this. http://www.online-literature.com/donne/729/ RE: [SHORT POEM] Silent night. - Canoris - 05-26-2012 (05-25-2012, 07:15 PM)Daniel Faraday Wrote: Using at the end of the line really helps the repetition, but I do agree that the usage could be better. Tears, Idle Tears is a great example of this.I've done a many poems that have repetition at the beginning. It's possible. Look up some of shakespeares stuff. RE: [SHORT POEM] Silent night. - gsc3po - 06-24-2012 it feels like it should be part of a larger work. then you could expand on the 2nd line repetition idea. if this is just a stand alone verse then i don't think it matters, but i think you could keep going with it. look at the lay out of the first verse and play with it over the course of the other verses. make it a theme that you adapt as the poem progresses. you can tweek the subtleties and get people thinking. RE: [SHORT POEM] Silent night. - pearl - 02-14-2020 Norton offers support to install the software on the computer same way we, here at superb support offers www.norton.com/setup premium services to support the user to install Norton and other antivirus programs and other computer related issues. |